Sarah's Family

Bobby Shaw

Book Cover

GENRE

DRAMA

    Core Theme

    FAMILY

    TIME PERIOD

    1980s & '90s,20th Century (multiple decades),2000s,Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    THE GODFATHER

    CHARACTER LIST

    SARAH: 45. LEAD. MATERNAL.

    SARAH: 45. LEAD. MATERNAL.

    DAVID: 20S. SARAH'S SON.

    DWAYNE: 20S. SARAH'S SON.

    GWEN: 20S. DWAYNE'S DAUGHTER.

    HOPE: 20S. DAVID'S DAUGHTER

    ELRIDGE: 40S. SARAH'S FATHER'S FRIEND.

    Logline

    Sarah’s Family Away to surviving the hard time as well as when the times became good. Sarah never made any excites as you will see by how she raised her two sons to become who they were, and how the two sons raise their children to become who they were.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning,Male Leaning

    Setting

    Any city with a small town outside the city

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Self-published

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    The story starts with Sarah living in a small town outside the city losing her husband, and trying to figure out how to take care of her sons, going to get on welfare, but with the feeling of not being able to fill out the paper work, she's becomes a bootlegger and drug dealer.

    Ending Description

    Hope Sarah's granddaughter finally gets the revenge of the man that she felt had something to do with the death of her son. And turning the drug game over the years to a legit business.

    Group Specific

    African American, and whoever likes American American stories.

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Other

    Plot - Premise

    Rags to Riches,Other

    Main Character Details

    Name: Sarah

    Age: 45

    Gender: Female

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Sexy

    Additional Character Details

    Name: David,

    Age: 20-

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Leader,Honorable

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Dwayne

    Age: 19

    Gender: Male

    Role: logical

    Key Traits: Criminal,Skillful,Honorable

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Hope

    Age: 25

    Gender: Female

    Role: emotional

    Key Traits: Badass,Aspiring,Complex,Sexy,Blunt,Leader

    Development Pitch

    This story is about Sarah's family getting into the drug game; one of her son's becoming a big time lawyer while her other son becoming a big time drug dealer, after her death. Sarah two son's David the lawyer and Dwayne the drug dealer stuck together because that was apart of the plan how both were going to make it. Later Dwayne and David has daughters, but David never did no that he had a daughter until later in life. . Dwayne took care of his daughter Gwen and his niece Hope, and they were not only cousins, but the best of friends. Dwayne also took care of these other two guys Matthew ,and Eldridge, because he was friends with their father's before they went to prison, and both their fathers dying in prison. Dwayne brought them into the drug game; Later Eldridge has a baby by Gwen Gwen, She was going to lose the baby because she needed blood. Finding out Hope has the same blood type as Gwen; Hope saved Gwen and her babies boy Alfonso life. A year latter Hope has a baby boy by Matthew, and his name is Cooper. Eldridge did not like Matthew because he felt he was getting more work then he was; he set Matthew up; now Matthew went to prison. Eldridge also put into his son's Alfonso head that we was better than Cooper was; Cooper was a star basketball player in High School. One day Alfonso and Cooper got into a fight; Alfonso stab Cooper to death. From that point on, Hope wanted revenge to do what she could do to take Eldridge out.

    Genre

    DRAMA

    Brief

    A woman's husband dies so she goes into the drug trade. She dies, and her kids go into the trade. They die, and their kids go into the trade. Someone else dies and so they all decide to go legit.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The profile accurately portrays this book.

    Draw of Story

    The story about a family trying to go legitimate despite tragedy sounds appealing.

    Possible Drawbacks

    This was almost illegible, I’m afraid to say. This was so difficult to read that despite its short length it took me days to go through it. It’s convoluted.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    A family entrenched in the drug trade struggles to go legitimate.

    Fanbase Potential

    Absolutely not. Characters are never introduced properly and then die before you can even start to care about them. Also, all of the characters feel like the exact same people, interchangeable.

    Awards Potential

    As it is, no.

    Envisioned Budget

    LOW BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    THE GODFATHER

    What’s New About the Story

    It would be more unique if it was successful in establishing the tone early on.

    Lead Characters

    Who is the lead character? Sarah dies right at the beginning of the story. Dwayne gets cancer, but David is the one that dies of it. Is that an oversight? An intentional plot twist? These questions should be addressed.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This kind of story has been done before. It doesn’t mean that it can work, but this book is still extremely raw. It needs thorough revisions.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    There is no story. This book is just a list of characters dying and killing each other. People get married offscreen. Main characters die offscreen. Nothing actually happens in the story for a story where so many people die.

    Tips for Improvement

    The author would need to review the structure and grammar before presenting the work for adaptation.

    Brief

    A family entrenched in the drug trade strives to go legitimate. Tragedies, however, keep their lives in the seedy underground world.

    What We Liked

    This was a unique story spanning five generations of a family instead of just focusing on a few characters.

    Film: As a film, this would be a blockbuster family crime drama.

    TV: As a television show, this would be an anthology following the lives of these characters.

    Key points: Action; Drama; Romance; Crime; Plot twists

    Synopsis

    Sarah, a mother of two kids, Dwayne and David, gets a phone call one evening and discovers that her husband has been found dead. Sarah immediately worries about how she will provide for and support her two sons. She goes to her father and asks him to help set her up bootlegging. Sarah begins bootlegging, and pretty soon begins dealing in harder drugs. While her kids are still young, Sarah begins to teach them both the ropes of the drug trade.

    Sarah dies, and Dwayne takes over the illegal family business, while David goes to law school and becomes a lawyer. David secretly works for the family business as well. While in school, David meets a stripper and student named Wanda, who he gets pregnant. Shortly before he learns Wanda is pregnant, he becomes involved with a woman named Belinda, and marries her. Wanda gives birth to Hope, and Dwayne raises Hope as if she is his daughter, alongside Dwayne's daughter, Gwen.

    Two of Dwayne and David's associates, Alphonso and Cooper, rob a bank and get killed. Dwayne gets diagnosed with cancer. Hope marries a man named Matthew. David puts his son, David Jr., in charge of the law firm, and puts Hope's husband, Matthew, in charge of the drug trade. David dies.

    Elridge frames Matthew with drugs so that he can take over the business instead. Matthew goes to prison. Gwen's son, Alphonso, kills Hope's son, Cooper, over a girl. Elridge manipulates things so that Alphonso gets found not guilty. Hope and Valarie shoot up Gwen's house and Gwen leaves Elridge. Elridge teaches Alphonso the drug trade. Alphonso gets murdered and the family all vow to go legitimate.

    About The Author

    The author was born in Alabama in 1964. Military, to Plant Worker, a BS degree in Business Management, now a writer.