ACTION, DRAMA, FANTASY

Tyriii struggles to feel like she belongs in her possum kingdom; especially in public life as the daughter of the king and with a sister who possesses rare beauty. She goes on a quest to defeat darkness. Along the way she learns to accept herself and finds people who like her unique personality as is. When Tyriii returns home, confident and finally happy, she is given a hero's welcome and embraced by all.

GOOD

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: EXCELLENT

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: FAIR

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: FAIR

Theme: EXCELLENT

The usage of the short summary pronoun usage without context makes it seem like the Shadow's sister is in danger and not Tyriii's sister. By reintroducing Tyriii as the protagonist in the short summary first before the villain, the relationship will be clearer. The development pitch is dense so may benefit from being broken up into two paragraphs based around the subject switch from Tyriii to the discussion of the book's themes.

The world building is very clear and the moral lessons are refreshingly nuanced for a younger audience. The themes are well developed and the characters smoothly discuss them as well as enact their values through overcoming their individual internal conflicts.

This is definitely a saga with a huge cast of characters and original folklore so as an animated movie with multiple hero's journey's this might be too dense. Were it to be changed to a TV show linking the episodes by character and plot development rather than theme might help make the external conflict easier to follow. So many characters make remembering where the character is on their journey a bit tough, especially for young audiences with too many characters are placed in between singular journeys.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that the animal characters are different in a variety of ways and the protagonist is a possum. These difference mimic real life diversity and there are nuanced moral lessons within the plot.

This has the potential to have a large fanbase for children and their caregivers as it is a unique animal world with smart lessons that kids can understand but fresh enough for parents to enjoy.

Due to the refreshing moral lessons and reevaluation of good versus evil, if this were to become an animated venture either as a children's series or film, this does have potential to garner notice in the awards circuit.

LARGE BUDGET

ZOOTOPIA, BRAVE, MOANA, SING, COCO, KUBO, RATATOUILLE,

The unique elements of the story stem from the diverse way the animal kingdom interacts and the way virtues are treated within society. Accepting differences is a key lesson but the scope is so broad that focusing on deeper transformations for a smaller group of characters might enhance the emotional investment and make the external conflicts easier to follow depending on the type of adaptation.

Tyriii is independent, smart, and fearless; she becomes a role model of self-acceptance and introversion. Her father is wise and loving and methodical. Her sister, Fridaaa, is bubbly and consistent in her generosity of spirit such as when Tyriii is short with her, Fridaaa still treats her with joy and respect. Lukhas is the striking albino fox who is fierce and devoted and spouts super cool action hero lines when given the chance.

This has so much potential in its setting, characters and themes. It has a lot going on, but maybe too much going on inn complexity for children to follow in such a condensed manner. Either splitting up the lessons and external conflicts to more digestible portions in separate narratives or reducing the amount of characters and information presented through in-world storytelling to teach the morality, might then make the story simpler to follow with its multiple character arcs for younger audiences.

TV Series - Network, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Breaking up the saga to focus more solely on Tyriii's journey or separating the narrative into more digestible portions (such as either decreasing the size of the cast to track their internal conflicts more easily or by streamlining the external conflict to unify their theme more succinctly) may help simplify the structure.