The Prophecy: The Golden Vampire Avengers and Their Guardian Wolf
ACTION APOCALYPTIC DRAMA RELIGIOUS POLITICAL GOTHIC WAR HISTORICAL FICTION YOUNG ADULT
17th Century or Earlier,Earlier 20th Century,20th Century (multiple decades),2000s,Across Centuries
B.L.Letourneau
Submision Type
book
Logline
Twins are left stranded in Mexico when their parents disappeared. An uncle rescued them. They did not know him. He came in his jet and flew them to Sedona, Arizona. A new place, new people and everything was not as it seemed.
Genre
Action,Apocalyptic,Drama,Religious,Political,Gothic,War,Historical Fiction,Young Adult
Short Summary
Jessie and Johnny are on the eve of their 18th birthday. The day started out normal, but on the way home they are kidnapped. Jessie awakes from a drugged state in a cellar. Johnny is not there. Normal becomes a living nightmare from then on which there was no end.
Setting
Mexico, Arizona, London, Italy, and back to Mexico
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Jessie DeWitt
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Honorable,Leader,Patriotic,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Johnny DeWitt
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Honorable,Insecure,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Michael Dubois
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Role: skeptic
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Romantic,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Jonathan DeWitt
Age: 400 +
Gender: Male
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Religious,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Visionary,Secretive
Genre
THRILLER, ACTION, FANTASY
Brief
Jessie and Johnny are kidnapped and their parents disappear at a car crash in Mexico. The twins are rescued by their Uncle who turns them into vampires to fulfill a prophecy. Along with his own werewolf son, Johnathan send the trio to Europe to prepare to fight evil vampires and complete his vision of saving the world.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes the book profile does describe the story for the most part. It may be better to define the fairy tale details in the short summary as specific to the narrative rather than leaving it as allusions. Listing the antagonist as one of the four main characters rather than Michael may also be beneficial to better reflect the breakdown of the narrative.
Draw of Story
The confusion in the kidnapping is palpable and the unexpected vampire angle rather than a strictly action story makes good supernatural surprise twist.
Possible Drawbacks
There is a shift not just in character pov but from first to third person. It is a bit jarring and hard to follow especially when in the cell Jessie's and Johnny's thoughts are in first person but later the same character's POV is in third person omniscient instead. Changing characters as the main focus is fine for an ensemble story but having parallel structure between first or third person would make the narrative more cohesive.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that the teenage twins are saved from kidnapping only to discover they are chosen to fight evil vampires after becoming vampires themselves and having a prominent uncle vampire.
Fanbase Potential
There is a distinct vampire subgenre within fantasy action films as to which the market hasn't been too saturated with lately so this could have a decent size audience. However, it would still be smaller than a normal action film due to its cross-genre approach of vampires.
Awards Potential
Given the dual elements of supernatural vampires and werewolves along with the action genre, this is unlikely to get nominated in the prestige circuit but may find itself in certain popular awards circuit categories.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
TWILIGHT SAGA, UNDERWORLD, TRUE BLOOD, SKINWALKERS
What’s New About the Story
The originality stems from the werewolf prophecy that the twin vampires must fight evil along with their cousin, a guardian wolf. Making the wolf element clearer earlier and giving perspective to the wolf may help equally integrate the wolf element more consistently.
Lead Characters
Jessie is a it naive but agressive and decisive. Johnny is calmer and more proper but also loyal. Johnathan is selfless and helpful.
Uniqueness of Story
There are unique vampire elements in how the werewolf saga is combined but the characters lack some development to feel fully three-dimensional with maximum emotional investment.
Possible Formats
Film - Streaming, Film - Indie, Film - Studio
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Adding clear inner conflicts to all of the characters will help create further investment in the prophecy outside of its external morality and action elements. By showing their motivations as individuals rather than just as responses to external stimuli, the goals will be strengthened as a team effort.