The Prophecy: The Golden Vampire Avengers and Their Guardian Wolf
ACTION APOCALYPTIC DRAMA RELIGIOUS POLITICAL GOTHIC WAR HISTORICAL FICTION YOUNG ADULT
17th Century or Earlier,Earlier 20th Century,20th Century (multiple decades),2000s,Across Centuries
Twins are left stranded in Mexico when their parents disappeared. An uncle rescued them. They did not know him. He came in his jet and flew them to Sedona, Arizona. A new place, new people and everything was not as it seemed.
Action,Apocalyptic,Drama,Religious,Political,Gothic,War,Historical Fiction,Young Adult
Jessie and Johnny are on the eve of their 18th birthday. The day started out normal, but on the way home they are kidnapped. Jessie awakes from a drugged state in a cellar. Johnny is not there. Normal becomes a living nightmare from then on which there was no end.
Nightmares become real. Fairy tale monsters are real. A Prophecy curse that was set in motion centuries earlier was all to real. One part of the Prophecy was set, the sacrifice of the twins fulfilling part one. 2 parts to go. Flying to Europe to meet the rest of the war council. Life and Death,
Mexico, Arizona, London, Italy, and back to Mexico
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Jessie DeWitt
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Honorable,Leader,Patriotic,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Johnny DeWitt
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Honorable,Insecure,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Michael Dubois
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Romantic,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Jonathan DeWitt
Age: 400 +
Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Religious,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Visionary,Secretive
Jessie and Johnny DeWitt are kidnapped on the eve of their 18th birthday. Their Uncle Jonathan rescues them from their underground kidnappers. At the very essence of their birthday; Jonathan gives the twins the kiss of death. Jessie and Johnny are reborn as vampires and are baptized into the world of the evilness of the undead. Thus they fulfilled the first part of an ancient prophecy near Sedona, Arizona. They live on a ranch with their Uncle Jolnathan DeWitt. The twins; Jessie and Johnny DeWitt are kidnapped by an old vampire group from Europe to keep them from fulfilling the prophecy. Jessie and Johnny were born to be the new guard of Vampire/Avengers for humanity, against the evil of satan's oldest vampire; Sirius and his soldiers of death. Unbeknown to his teen wards; their uncle is an ancient is an ancient vampire from the 14th century. He was the head priest of the old guard of the Church; ordered to fight against evil. Jonathan's son was born from a family of shape shifters/werewolves. The Legacy of the Prophecy is that the Twin Golden Swords and their Guardian Wolf would save humanity from Satan and his evil Vampire soldiers. The Prophecy began centuries earlier as Jonathan lay dying in a pool of his blood; he saw the vision of the twins and their guardian werewolf. They stood between Cardinal Sirius and Jonathan's dying body. He cursed Sirius and foretold about the war on his evil on both, the Americas and Europe.
THRILLER, ACTION, FANTASY
Jessie and Johnny are kidnapped and their parents disappear at a car crash in Mexico. The twins are rescued by their Uncle who turns them into vampires to fulfill a prophecy. Along with his own werewolf son, Johnathan send the trio to Europe to prepare to fight evil vampires and complete his vision of saving the world.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes the book profile does describe the story for the most part. It may be better to define the fairy tale details in the short summary as specific to the narrative rather than leaving it as allusions. Listing the antagonist as one of the four main characters rather than Michael may also be beneficial to better reflect the breakdown of the narrative.
Draw of Story
The confusion in the kidnapping is palpable and the unexpected vampire angle rather than a strictly action story makes good supernatural surprise twist.
There is a shift not just in character pov but from first to third person. It is a bit jarring and hard to follow especially when in the cell Jessie's and Johnny's thoughts are in first person but later the same character's POV is in third person omniscient instead. Changing characters as the main focus is fine for an ensemble story but having parallel structure between first or third person would make the narrative more cohesive.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that the teenage twins are saved from kidnapping only to discover they are chosen to fight evil vampires after becoming vampires themselves and having a prominent uncle vampire.
There is a distinct vampire subgenre within fantasy action films as to which the market hasn't been too saturated with lately so this could have a decent size audience. However, it would still be smaller than a normal action film due to its cross-genre approach of vampires.
Given the dual elements of supernatural vampires and werewolves along with the action genre, this is unlikely to get nominated in the prestige circuit but may find itself in certain popular awards circuit categories.
Similar Films/TV Series
TWILIGHT SAGA, UNDERWORLD, TRUE BLOOD, SKINWALKERS
What’s New About the Story
The originality stems from the werewolf prophecy that the twin vampires must fight evil along with their cousin, a guardian wolf. Making the wolf element clearer earlier and giving perspective to the wolf may help equally integrate the wolf element more consistently.
Jessie is a it naive but agressive and decisive. Johnny is calmer and more proper but also loyal. Johnathan is selfless and helpful.
Uniqueness of Story
There are unique vampire elements in how the werewolf saga is combined but the characters lack some development to feel fully three-dimensional with maximum emotional investment.
Film - Streaming, Film - Indie, Film - Studio
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Adding clear inner conflicts to all of the characters will help create further investment in the prophecy outside of its external morality and action elements. By showing their motivations as individuals rather than just as responses to external stimuli, the goals will be strengthened as a team effort.