The Pilbara Killings

Andrew Zbar megando57@yahoo.com 5026515124378

CRIME

Contemporary

Andrew Zbar

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Logline

If no one cares about the death of a young Aboriginal girl in the Pilbara desert why on earth should the detective assigned to her case? Murder is one thing but without an enemy in the world why was she so mutilated? When the investigation points to a priest why is the Church so uncooperative?

Genre

Crime

Short Summary

A young Aboriginal girl is found murdered and mutilated with strange marks on her neck, ancient symbols on her body and a tribal death ritual mark...the Catholic Church is embroiled in a sexual abuse scandal...the two developing stories are linked


One old murder is linked to this new one, most likely both done by a Catholic priest thought dead ...until there is another identical murder reported from another remote Australian town

Setting

Remote outback Australia

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Sexual Abuse, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Aidan Zimmerman

Age: 55

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Decisive,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Merindah Jeffries

Age: 40

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Empathetic,Uneducated,Selfless,Romantic

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

The cadence of the book is written cinematically with a film in mind. Why should anyone care about another Aboriginal death where it has been always so much part of their culture? But can a mutilated girl be ignored, particularly when it all leads to the Church? Should the Archbishop who is just about to be elevated to a Cardinal even care? And how is a sexual abuse scandal in his own Diocese connected? When the lead detective injudiciously begins an affair with the dead girl's mother how will it affect the investigation? And how much do higher powers want to derail that investigation led by an ambitious detective just for purely anti-Semitic reasons? The Pilbara Killings is a story of savage murder, tribal ritual and cover-up, where for possibly the first time on film (if it gets that far) one of the central protagonists is an Aboriginal woman. The book explores the genesis of evil but in this story, nothing is as it seems.

About The Author

A retired academic surgeon who worked in many countries (Australian born but worked there and in remote Australia where the book is set as well as in the UK, Israel, Madagascar)... wrote a number of academic textbooks and many academic articles... first work of forensic fiction... Formal synopsis as required...attached Many thx AZ

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,55+,18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

It has some quintessentially Australian elements

Publishing Details

Status: No

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA, RELIGON

Brief

Zimmerman is called to the horrific scene of a young girl murdered and mutilated. She was Aboriginal which does not get much press. Zimmerman starts to investigate the symbols and connects it to another gruesome murder. He learns that a Catholic Church bishop is behind the murders after he abused the two children.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: GOOD

Theme: EXCELLENT

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile highlights the themes and storyline in the book. I could be more specific because it is asked in question form but it hits all the major ideas.

Draw of Story

The story begins with describing the mutilated body of young Lisa. It sets the tone for the story, explaining the gruesome nature of the crime.

Possible Drawbacks

The story explores the dark and twisted crimes committed in vivid detail. It can be difficult to read. The story is very descriptive and wordy. This makes for a slower read to really decipher each sentence. There is a running theme of racism as well. The Aborigines are treated with distain and mild tolerance when Australia was stolen from them from colonizers. It is interesting to see this in media, especially Western media because the Aboriginal story is rarely told.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that a young Aboriginal girl is found dead and covered in markings. Her murder goes mostly unnoticed until signs pointing to the Catholic Church being responsible. I would watch this movie for the unique view of Australia and it's racial issues as well as seeing its' criminal justice system.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase because it is a gritty, crime drama. This story doesn't hold back and gives the audience a realistic view of all the events of the story. It doesn't fly over any of the gruesome parts especially since the main character, Zimmerman, is a coroner.

Awards Potential

This could have awards potential because it dives into very serious topics and explores human nature. The antagonist has sadistic tendencies and grotesque beliefs. The systemic racism and long term effects of colonization are also explored.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

LUTHER, SILENCE OF THE LAMBS, SEVEN

What’s New About the Story

This story is original because it shows the horrific treatment of Aborigines in Australia. It is not a well known topic in America and is due to have some light shed on it. It also explores the long term effects of colonization and racism on native people. The story has many gruesome and horrifying moments because they are so realistic.

Lead Characters

Zimmerman is the coroner that first views Lisa's body. He is an outsider to the culture but benefits from the white privilege. He doesn't rock the boat or fight against the racism he sees. He goes with the flow until he is forced to take a side when the signs are to great ignore. His action and motivations are very realistic.

Uniqueness of Story

This is a gem of a story. It is gritty and gruesome crime story that tackles serious topics. It needs some work to hone the story and cut the excess.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

Analyst Recommendation

RECOMMEND

Justification

This story shows the effects of colonization in Australia on the Aboriginal community. The crime story is horrible , but opens the door to bigger issues such as racism and the secrets of the Catholic Church. There is a dark tone to the story that is very appealing and enticing.