Black River

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ACTION HORROR SUSPENSE/THRILLER YOUNG ADULT

Contemporary

Andrew Platt

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Logline

Two feuding groups of friends are put up against a leader of a secret society/cult. The leader of the cult is testing the virus out on the townspeople to weed out the weak with horrifying consequences. The groups have to come together to find a way to take down the cult and stop the spread.

Genre

Action,Horror,Suspense/Thriller,Young Adult

Short Summary

The Story begins with two people arguing over how they killed someone and how it was supposed to look like an accident. They search the victim’s office for something, tearing about the place looking for something but can’t seem to find it.


The warden calls for back up but it's too late. The group manages to destroy the device and escape with the guards, while the Warden leaves with Shea and the captured Sarah as the building crumbles. The guards are picked up by the Wardens men and threatened to give up the locations of the others.

Setting

Fictional Town of Black River

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Darren

Age: 20's

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Heroic,Honorable,Visionary

Additional Character Details

Name: Shea

Age: 20's

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Leader,Sarcastic,Power Hungry,Badass,Confident

Additional Character Details

Name: The Warden

Age: 50's

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Underdog,Power Hungry,Patriotic,Religious,Outspoken,Visionary,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: The Warden

Age: 50's

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Villainous,Power Hungry,Skillful,Leader,Unapologetic

Development Pitch

The setup for the story is engaging with a privileged young man leaving jail to rejoin a world from which he has been cut off while having to reconcile the death of his father and the windfall of money left to him. There is already tension between the group of friends - or perhaps former friends - but the prologue, much like the teaser of a TV drama, creates a different kind of tension that hangs over the rest of the story because we know the people who have killed Steve and the nefarious nature of his murder. Further, the shifting from one character's P O V to another also adds a ton of tension because the story incrementally builds each respective thread while the dramatic irony lent to the audience grows. The altercation and then forcing congregants of the Wardens command to fight each other can remind you of somewhat similar to Butch and Marcellus in Pulp Fiction, wherein they have a serious score to settle, but are apprehended by the owners of the pawnshop and forced to fight for their lives together against a sudden common enemy. The story is highly adaptable for tv or film with elements of mystery, horror, thriller, and suspense with enough questions to end each installment with the audience wanting more.

About The Author

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Anderson Platt Publishing, LLC

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-7359413-2-5

Genre

ACTION, THRILLER, SUSPENSE

Brief

Two groups of friends get involved in an organization testing a virus on the public. They each have separate experiences trying to get away from the group as they are injected with virus. Some of them die after bad reactions and they come together to take down the machine creating the virus.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story begins with a murder and a man serving jail time. The two were not related but created curiosity as to how the plot points would come together.

Possible Drawbacks

The story jumps between people and feels like they are all having completely separate experiences. They're isn't a lot of cohesion until the very end. It should be intertwine more and the characters should be related in some way besides there shared experiences. The dialogue is lacking.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that a virus is being experimented on the general public and two groups of friends get caught up in trying to stop it.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase. The story needs more development and depth. It is very jumbled with the continued change of perspectives that include different events and different characters.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. The story needs to be developed better, but it does not have anything unique that sets it apart from other science fiction thrillers or dramas.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

MAZE RUNNER: DEATH CURE, DARK WATERS

What’s New About the Story

The story is not original. A cult is testing a virus on the general public and it is wrecking havoc. A group of friends are caught up in it, trying to stop them. This story is similar to so many as is lacking in depth. It focuses on the friends instead of giving time to the cult and the virus.

Lead Characters

The lead characters do not stand out. They are a random group of people banding together to get away from the hands of a cult that is trying to kill them with a virus. They aid in moving the plot along but are not unique individuals.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story. This needs a lot of work in developing the world of the story. It is more than the characters and their reaction to the plot.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

It would be interesting to understand more of the world of the cult to give gravity to the situation. The virus is killing people but more on the science of the virus would be interesting. The world of the story needs to be elaborated more.