SNOW MEN

ANDREW CERONI

Book Cover

GENRE

ACTION DRAMA SUSPENSE / THRILLER

    Core Theme

    OVERCOMING ONE'S PERSONAL ISSUES TO COMPLETE A JOB FOR THE GREATER GOOD.

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    JACK RYAN, PATRIOT GAMES, THE JASON BOURNE SERIES

    CHARACTER LIST

    • DAVE MCCLURE: 33. LEAD. STRONG, SKILLFUL, STRONG MORAL CODE, MASCULINE, INTELLIGENT, ADAPTABLE, PATRIOTIC, HEROIC, HONORABLE.

    • PETE NOVAK: 53. A HIGHER UP IN THE INTELLIGENCE SERVICES AND DAVE'S BOSS.

    • KRASNOFF: 35. THE MAIN VILLAIN, A RUSSIAN THAT DAVE HAS TO DEFEAT.

    • IVANOFF: 31. ONE OF DAVE'S ADVERSARIES AND A RUSSIAN SOLDIER.

    • MEIRA: 30S. A MOSSAD OFFICER WHO SAVES DAVE'S LIFE.

    • RAPHAEL: 30S. A MOSSAD OFFICER WHO HELPS UNCOVER THE PLOT THAT DAVE MUST FOIL.

    Logline

    A murder in the Alaskan wilderness is only the beginning of the unimaginable! Dave McClure heads to Alaska, seeking solace, resolving to put his painful past behind him or succumb to the unforgiving arctic wilderness. Instead, he finds the body of a hunter whose throat has been cut ear-to-ear.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    The Alaska Wrangell-St. Elias wilderness; Paris, France; Amsterdam, The Netherlands; Tel Aviv and Jerusalem, Israel; Phuket, Thailand and Washington, DC.

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Outskirts Press

    Year Published: 2015

    Starting Description

    Dave McClure is on a plane to Alaska, having quit his job with the FBI and turned his back on the world. A year since the horrific accident that claimed his wife and son, and he is yet unable to move past his grief. He heads into the arctic wilderness, seeking solace, but finds unimaginable horror.

    Ending Description

    A clash as McClure tries to stop the Russian Spetsnaz team hijacking of a missile's nuclear warhead at a railway bridge in eastern Alaska near the Canadian border. The final climax in Washington DC occurs as the Chairman, OJCS approves an intercept of an Iranian missile headed for Israel.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    978-1478773474

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Meaningful Message

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: David "Dave" McClure

    Age: 33

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Decisive,Engaging,Empathetic,Heroic,Honorable,Masculine,Patriotic,Sexy,Selfless,Skillful,Strong Moral Code

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Peter Novak, Deputy Director for Operations (the DepOps), CIA

    Age: 53

    Gender: Male

    Role: Mentor

    Key Traits: Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Educated,Leader,Skillful,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Blunt

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Major Vassily Krasnoff, Russian GRU Intelligence Officer, leader of mission to hijack a missile's nuclear warhead

    Age: 35

    Gender: Male

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Masculine,Villainous,Blunt,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Sarcastic,Unapologetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Captain Alexi Ivanov, Spetsnaz team lead

    Age: 31

    Gender: Male

    Role: logical

    Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Faithful,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Skillful

    Development Pitch

    A murder in the Alaskan wilderness is only the beginning of the unimaginable! Fans of Tom Clancy’s Jack Ryan series, Robert Ludlum’s Jason Bourne series as well as the works of Nelson DeMille, Daniel Silva and Brad Thor will be drawn to this riveting thriller and its blockbuster film. Dave McClure is on a plane to Alaska in early winter, having quit his job with the FBI and turned his back on the world. It’s been a year since the horrific accident that claimed his wife and son, and McClure is still unable to move beyond his grief. Remembering the joy he once shared with his wife on vacation in Alaska, he heads north…seeking solace and resolving to either put his painful past behind him or allow himself to succumb to the unforgiving Alaskan wilderness. Instead, McClure finds a grisly scene in the forest–the body of a hunter whose throat has been cut ear to ear. And that’s only the beginning. In SNOW MEN–equal parts international thriller and arctic wilderness survival tale, McClure uncovers an Iranian-Russian plot to steal a missile's nuclear warhead being shipped by train to an airbase in Alaska and use it to wipe the nation of Israel off the map. With only a hunting rifle, a pistol and a few days’ worth of provisions, Dave McClure not only faces a Russian Spetsnaz special forces team and the harsh reality of nature but discovers a will to live he didn’t know he still had. SNOW MEN is a heart-pounding thriller set against the pristine beauty of Alaska’s arctic wilderness.

    Genre

    ACTION, THRILLER, DRAMA, POLITICS, WAR, SUSPENSE

    Brief

    Ex-CIA agent Dave goes to Alaska to live off the land. He stumbles onto a group of Russians stealing nuclear warheads for sale to Iran. Dave kills most of them. Iran launches a nuclear missile at Israel but it's shot down.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: GOOD

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, the profile does depict the book properly.

    Draw of Story

    Espionage and action.

    Possible Drawbacks

    There is a lot of description of the mundane and not enough time spent on the characters' thoughts.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    A special agent trying to avert a nuclear disaster.

    Fanbase Potential

    Probably not. For the genre, it's not as interesting or complex as it could be.

    Awards Potential

    No. The story and lead character are not interesting or original enough at this point.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    JACK RYAN, PATRIOT GAMES, CLEAR AND PRESENT DANGER

    What’s New About the Story

    The story is original in that the main character, while being a spy, is going through intense emotional trauma. It would be more unique if the character's pathology was explored more.

    Lead Characters

    He is suffering from intense psychological trauma while having to do a very hard job.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No. The plot would require more twists and turns and the main character needs a richer inner life.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    It needs a more complicated plot with twists and turns as well as story that isn't easy to poke holes into. There is too much description of mundane tasks by the main character.

    Tips for Improvement

    A more complex story with twists, turns and surprises. Also, the interesting gadetry and technologies are underused.

    Brief

    Special Agent Dave McClure goes to Alaska on a personal trip, but finds a plot to start a war. With limited resources, he decides to take on Russian soldiers who want to hijack a nuclear weapon. Despite overwhelming odds, Dave goes up against Russian soldiers and nature itself.

    What We Liked

    - A highly skilled special agent who goes up against overwhelming odds has alway been a big draw for readers and movie goers, and SNOW MEN is one of those stories. Set in freezing Alaska, Dave is outmanned and outgunned by Russians who want to start a war. He uses his special skills to take them on and save the day - and maybe even the world.
    - The majestic Alaskan wilderness is an epic backdrop for any film, and this one would have plenty of action set against it. The huge scale of the plot and limited time frame is great structure for a motion picture. The stakes couldn't be any higher - a nuclear war is possible if the protagonist doesn't get the job done. While the bad guys plot in cities around the world, their undoing lies in one man with a couple of guns in the middle of nowhere. The contrast is interesting, and this story could make a taught action thriller.
    - Key points: Spies;Nuclear war; Dangerous nature; Gun fights; International politics

    Synopsis

    JACK STROUD is alone in the woods in Alaska, next to the fire he built. He is scared. All white creatures that walked on two legs were hunting him and if they came back he only had four rounds in his rifle. He wakes up, and they’re back. He fires his four rounds then runs. The men catch him, and one uses a knife to cut his throat. PETE NOVAK, 40s, visits DAVE MCLCURE, 30s, at his home in Colorado. Jack is still mourning the death of his wife and son from a car accident a year ago. Pete wants him to come back to work in the CIA. McClure declines the offer. He plans to go to Alaska and live off the land for a while. Earlier in Paris, MADANI, head of Iran’s intelligence service, meets KRASNOFF, a Russian. They make a deal for three nuclear warheads for Iran to destroy Israel - for 200 million dollars. DANI, RAPHAEL and SIMONE, three spies, are watching, taking pictures, and trying to read lips. Raphael goes into a meeting at Mossad. Intelligence is wondering what Iran and Russia are up to since they are aware of the money exchange.

    Dave has flown to Alaska and started his trek. He loads up on gear at a store and is driven to an entrance point to the wilderness. He hikes on snowshoes and builds a camp before the early sunset. In Israel, Raphael and MEIRA, another Mossad agent, have breakfast and discuss what the Russian/Iranian threat could be and they soon end up discussing a nuclear weapon. Meira notices a man behaving strangely and he leaves a large bag across the street. She takes out her gun and tackles the man, then ends up blowing his brains out. She retrieves a remote detonator from his pocket. Raphael reaches her and they call the police.

    Dave runs into some Native Americans on snowmobiles - a man and his son. They give him some cuts of the moose they killed. Dave then finds the dead body of Jack Stroud, frozen, throat cut. He digs a grave then resolves to bring the killers to justice himself. NACHAYEV meets Krasnoff in Amsterdam. They discuss a nuclear “accident” that is to take place in Alaska. It will be an accident involving an American nuke, and it will force America to reassess its nuclear policies. In Alaska, Dave makes a base camp. He is awakened by a herd of caribou. He covers up his gear and sets off to track the murderers and finds some grizzly bear tracks. Then he finds their camp site. Eight men in white parkas with five tents. He watches through binoculars and sees they have Russian made assault rifles and speak Russian. In Israel, Raphael drives Meira home. She asks him in but he says no. He goes to Mossad headquarters and checks in. The next day, he brings in Meira. After a briefing on how American nuclear warheads are delivered, he realizes that’s what the two men in Paris were probably talking about. How would they get one though? He brings Meira into a room filled with agents and officers and she gets cheers and applause. She’s presented with two of the highest awards Israel gives, for her bravery in stopping the bomber. They are aware that Nachayev met Krasnoff in Amsterdam, and are concerned about the implications.

    In Alaska, Dave is confronted by a huge grizzly, and he’s terrified, but clicks his walking sticks together in the air and the creature finally lumbers away. He watches the Russians, who are preparing their snowmobiles. Then he watches as, on the coast. a Russian submarine pops up from the water. He wonders what they’re up to. The sub goes under again. The Russians hear that a large storm is headed their way and they postpone their mission. When the storm has passed, the Russians gather at some train tracks and their commander explains what they’re doing: they will sabotage the tracks and kill anyone aboard a train - that will be carrying nuclear warheads to an Air Force base. The train wreck will contaminate the area with radioactivity. The Native American man and his son arrive on snowmobiles to say hello - and the Russians fill them full of bullets. Angry and sad, Dave makes his way back to his camp and finds that he’s snared two rabbits and a fox.

    Raphael and Meira fly to Virginia where they meet Novak and are taken to their hotel rooms. First class treatment, and a visit to CIA headquarters the following morning where Raphael and Meira are put on a conference call with Novak and a bunch of the top brass. They alert the higher ups that they should increase security at the spots where the nuclear weapons are stored - in Wyoming, North Dakota, and Nebraska - since there is now the threat of Iran getting their hands on a nuke. Dave takes his animal carcasses and spreads the blood and guts over the Russian’s tents while they’re sleeping, hoping grizzly bears will ravage their campsite. He also sinks their rafts and throws out the communications gear that lets them talk to the sub. The Russians are attacked in their sleep by a grizzly. One of them gets his arm torn off and dies before they’re able to fend it off by shooting. They realize their communications transmitter is gone and so are the rafts. They also realize it must be the special agent they’d heard about from the Native American. Krasnoff tells his men the mission must go on.

    At CIA headquarters, Novak is trying to think of what may be going on. He uses a computer program called DELPHI and types in five words: KRASNOFF, SPETSNAZ, NUCLEAR, ALASKA, MADANI. Five minutes later he receives a one-word response: TRAIN. He makes plans to fly a small army to Alaska that evening, including Raphael and Meira. Dave builds a trap in the snow, burying sharp stakes and covering them up. He gets one of the Russians to chase him by stabbing him in the foot with a spear, then runs off until the Russian falls and is impaled on the buried stakes. The Russians are furious, but Krasnoff says the mission must still go on. Later that night, one of the Russians goes out alone to hunt Dave. Still awake, Dave hears a branch snap and spots the Russian, so he circles around behind him. The Russian fires into Dave’s tent with a machine gun, but Dave creeps up and stabs him in the ribs. They fight, and Dave is able to cut his throat - but not before the Russian stabs Dave in the shoulder.

    Krasnoff, dressed in Air Force clothes, flags down the train and it slows down. When the driver sticks his head out to ask what’s going on, they use high-tech electrical guns to shoot him and stop his heart. The Russians go to the back of the train where there is a security force who has opened their door. They quickly close it again when the Russians fire on them. McClure takes out two of the Russians with his rifle, but takes a bullet to the shoulder. While Krasnoff tries to take off, Dave takes him out, but not before getting another bullet - this time in his thigh. The Russians, however, are still able to derail the train off the bridge and the whole thing crashes down into a canyon and explodes. One of the Russians escapes on a snowbike, towing the stolen nuclear warhead.

    After communications with the train go silent, three Blackhawk helicopters take off from the Air Force base in Anchorage. Novak, Raphael, and Meira are with them. They find the wreckage of the train and Novak warns that Dave may be down there after he sees the bodies of the Russians. Dave is almost incapacitated by his wounds, and a Russian catches up to him. After an exchange of insults, the Russian is about to kill Dave when he gets blown away by Raphael. Meira, Novak and some soldiers aren’t far behind. They load Dave onto one of the Blackhawks and he passes out. From the hospital where Dave is being cared for, Novak calls Washington to get a team up there to search for the missing warhead.

    Dave is transferred to a hospital in Colorado. GENERAL HOLMES calls the President to authorize use of their top secret Reagan-era Star Wars program to take out a nuclear missile Iran has fired at Israel. Holmes hangs up on the obstinate President and gives the order anyway. The missile is blown up in space. The Israelis are notified. In Thailand, Krasnoff sits at a resort and under an assumed name. A waitress offers him a cocktail and he drinks it and quickly dies from the cyanide. The waitress is Meira. In Paris, Madani is given a laxative in his food and has to use the bathroom. The toilet seat explodes, killing him. Novak visits Dave in Colorado. He offers Dave a job, and Dave says he needs to give it some thought.

    About The Author

    Andrew Ceroni served a distinguished career as a Senior Supervisory Special Agent focused in Title 18 U.S.C. Chapter 37 espionage investigations as well as counterespionage and antiterrorism operations throughout Europe, the Middle East, and the Pacific Rim. He is a graduate of numerous intelligence and law enforcement training forums.