The Ringmasters’ Institute of Obstacles (TRIO)
ADVENTURE YOUNG ADULT FANTASY
Set in 2016, three best friends go through magical obstacles in a summer retreat to obtain their elemental powers, in forms of rings, in the thrilling realm of Mantra. Earth, Fire, Wind, Water, Electricity, or Psychic: they all must master their skills to qualify for their final exam.
Three young pals: Lamar (Artie), Antonio (Milo), and Carmen (Palma), have been transferred to Regency Academy School (RAS) by their own parents due to a school shooting. Having to accept their decision, they first attend RAS 2016 summer retreat.
Before departing to their new school for the fall, Lamar, Antonio, and Carmen said their goodbyes to their families. Out of the blue, a familiar character greeted them to escort them to the institution together.
Jersey City, NJ; Vernon, NJ; Mantra (magical realm)
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Lamar (Artie)
Key Traits: Badass,Masculine,Sexy,Engaging,Blunt,Sarcastic,Leader,Honorable,Educated,Heroic,Gracious,Faithful,Skillful,Selfless
Additional Character Details
Name: Antonio (Milo)
Key Traits: Modest,Obedient,Visionary,Faithful,Empathetic,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Complex
Additional Character Details
Name: Carmen (Paloma)
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Obedient,Outspoken,Romantic,Sophisticated
Additional Character Details
Name: Joey Martin (Ephraim Crowe)
Age: Late 40s
Key Traits: Manipulative,Unapologetic,Secretive,Naive,Crazy,Confident,Complex,Charming,Narcisstic,Villainous,Masculine,Desperate,Decisive,Criminal,Visionary,Power Hungry
Three best friends, who unbeknownst to them, have been transferred to Regency Academy School (RAS), a private high school in Vernon, New Jersey, by their own parents. Having more or less come to accept their decision, they soon discover the mysteries and wonder of their new school — with the assistance of a special chaperone and other unique characters along the way. RAS is certainly not your average institution, and they will learn how their friendship will be tested... in unimaginable ways.
FANTASY, DRAMA, ACTION
Lamar, Antonio and Carmen survive a school shooting, leading their parents to put them in a private school. The summer retreat reveals that they are from a magical lineage of the founders of Mantra. The spend the summer learning and wielding elemental powers to prepare for their final test. They must pass and fight a evil former student who discovered how to bring people back from the dead.
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The story begins with a school shooting that changes the lives of the main characters. It grounds the story in the current reality.
The story isn't sure what it wants to be in terms of age range. It definitely reads like a teen story in the beginning, but includes unnecessary sex and profanity. There could also be more in depth world building. Mantra is a magical place but the differences should be explored more.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that three friends are sent to a new school where they discover their magical lineage. I would watch this movie for the magical elements and seeing a diverse cast in the fantasy genre.
This could have a large fanbase as it is very similar to many other successful films. The main characters are diverse which is an added boon. The ideology behind the magic is not unique however.
This story does not have awards potential. It does not go into depth on any specific topic or character. The focus is on making it visually appealing and cool for the demographic.
Similar Films/TV Series
FATE: THE WINX SAGA, PERCY JACKSON AND THE OLYMPIANS, HARRY POTTER
What’s New About the Story
The story has very little that is original. The main characters go to a school where they learn magic and must test them out. A foe arises that they must help to defeat. The main unique element is that the 3 main characters are black and brown skinned people.
The lead characters stand out because they have bonded over a very traumatic event. They survived a terrifying school shooting where some of their classmates and teachers were killed. Those around them recognize that there is trauma and get them help accordingly. The main characters relationship between themselves also acknowledges the trauma and how each person is handling it and they treat each other well.
Uniqueness of Story
This is not a gem but an entertaining story that showcases a diverse cast. It also deals with serious topics such as gun violence, mass shootings and PTSD. To be more unique, the characters might find out about their magical history somewhere other than a school.
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming, TV Series - Cable
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The story needs to break out of the magical school troupe. There are other ways for the three friends to find out about magic. The dialogue is very on the nose and predictable contributing to the adolescent tone of the story. There needs to be more clear cut idea of the age group as well. It creeps into adult territory with the sexual relationships on display.