DRAMA, FANTASY

Jade and Antigone attend a scientific presentation that goes array. After, they begin to start showings of unusual abilities. The discovery of multi dimensions leads to to travel through many different worlds to stop Harriet from further disturbing the timelines.

GOOD

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

The story begins with fun social dynamics and banter, followed by a scientific accident that leaves the main characters changed. The main characters are a couple of woman which is refreshing for the genre.

The story doesn't take enough time at world building and the science behind the story seems to easy. The characters move in and out of dimensions without much difficulties. They also easily traverse in each dimension, interacting with people without much difficulties. The science seems to easy and unrealistic.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that Antigone and Jade must search through multidimensions to stop Harriet from causing havoc on alternate realities after she loses her family. I would watch the movie for the science fiction, female leads and fantastical alternate dimensions.

This could have a large fan base because it is science fiction and would piggy back of the surge in superhero stories. The characters are not superheroes but do possess unusual powers that are gained after a failed scientific experiment.

This does not have awards potential. The character development is minimal as is the world building. It seems too easy for them to move through dimensions and back again without consequences. There is a lot of time spent on seeing the different dimensions than delving into the science behind it and the powers the main characters acquire. There is a lack of depth because of it.

LARGE BUDGET

ANNIHILATION, FANTASTIC FOUR, HIS DARK MATERIALS

The story is original in the main characters are female in a science fiction/fantasy genre. The science of other dimensions have been done before. The story could be more unique if it delved into the science behind the story. That would set it apart from other stories.

The lead characters stand out because they are diverse females. The main characters have different experiences that are complicated and not related to their sex.

This is not a rare gem but could be if more time is taken in flushing out the world. The science behind the plot should be explored more as well as how they can move in between dimensions so easily. At one point, they go in and out through the day and make it home for dinner. It isn't extraordinary.

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WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

The story needs to flush out some of its ideology. Visually, this story has a lot going for it but the world building is lacking. The science experiment happens in the first scenes without much development. They are in their first dimensions soon after and able to communicate and integrate into that world relatively easily. There needs to be more conflict and difficulties for the characters.