ACTION CRIME DRAMA SUSPENSE/THRILLER MYSTERY
No one really retires from wet work". He'd heard it a hundred times - when he was recruited by the Agency, when he left the covert life, even from fellow agents. But Wolf Johannsen never thought the warning would apply to him.
Wolf Johannsen's last assignment for the C.I.A. was a nasty piece of work by the name of Gyuri Vargha. The kill is confirmed by a source in the Rome. Five years later, Gyuri Vargha, or a man calling himself Gyuri Vargha, reappears. Wolf is called out of retirement to investigate.
Vargha learns who Wolf is and where he now lives. Using multiple aliases and leaving a trail of dead bodies in his wake, Vargha plots his revenge and travels to the States, targeting Allison Parker, Wolf's lover, as bait.
Rome, Paris, London and Ft. Charles, Alabama
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
Extreme Violence,Nudity, Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Wolf Johannsen
Key Traits: Masculine,Complex,Sexy,Confident,Decisive,Skillful,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Allison Parker
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Sexy,Decisive,Engaging,Honorable,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Gyuri Vargha
Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Villainous,Narcisstic,Complex,Criminal,Secretive
Additional Character Details
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Wolf's last assignment for the C.I.A. was a nasty piece of work by the name of Gyuri Vargha. The kill is confirmed by a source in the Rome, Italy M.E.'s office, and the case is closed. But all is not as it seems. Five years later, Gyuri Vargha, or a man calling himself Gyuri Vargha, reappears. Reaching out to old contacts, Vargha identifies a deep cover agent, Rebecca Molinere, who he believes can reveal the identity of his would-be assassin. By torturing Rebecca, and killing an unwitting civilian who might give the alarm, Vargha learns who Wolf is and where he now lives. Using multiple aliases and leaving a trail of dead bodies in his wake, Vargha plots his revenge and travels to the States, targeting Allison Parker, Wolf's lover, as bait. Wolf, the book, is the fifth story in the Allison Parker Mystery Series. As with many of the preceding books in the series, familiar characters appear as the Feds and local law enforcement learn about Rebecca Molinere's murder and Wolf’s connection to Vargha. F.B.I. agent Jake Cleveland, tech wizard Pete Pantsari, ex-Seal Bennett Shealey and of course P.I. Frank Martin and Sheriff Toby Trowbridge join forces to set a trap for Vargha in the event he makes it to Ft. Charles, Alabama where Wolf now resides. TARGET AUDIENCE: Adult content, fast-paced thriller, multiple plot lines. Appeals to men and women. ADDITIONAL BACKGROUND: The Allison Parker Mystery Series, of which Wolf is a part, is set in the imaginary town of Ft. Charles, Alabam
Wolf looked forward to a calmer retired lifestyle as a hit man in the CIA; finally having the time to get close to someone special. However, his last hit, Gyuri Vargha comes back from the dead and threatens everything that Wolf has now learned to hold dear. Now that Wolf has something to lose, he must risk everything in order to save the woman he loves and get back in the game to settle things once and for all.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes for the most part the profile reflect to story. The development pitch perhaps focuses too much on the roles of minor characters when it could further elaborate on the themes of Wolf that differentiate it from other spy action films instead. The logline is also missing a quotation mark as it is unclear if the saying is a sentence or emphasizing "wet work" alone.
Draw of Story
The hook is that Wolf is a retired agent that has something to lose and his former life is what threatens to take away his newfound dreams. The hook is pretty clear from the start as Wolf is recruited early on with a phone call to verify Gyuri Vargha in Europe.
The dialogue can lack subtext at certain points and there are characters and conversations included within certain scenes that do not further the character development nor plot such as Beth's prying and the sheriff talking about Beth when Wolf went to the station to discuss business. By adding more variation to the dialogue, the characters will be more individual in their speech patterns and the intrigue of the spy thriller will increase due the room left open for misdirection.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is the Wolf already killed Gyuri Vargha but Gyuri Vargha is back and out to seek revenge of Wolf. Wolf now has a life that can be threatened unlike his former days as an top agent without stakes or distractions.
This is an easy to follow action movie with a standard plot so perhaps could have a medium audience to large audience depending on the casting.
Given that this is an action film it is unlikely to gain serious awards consideration, but could perhaps do okay in popular awards circuits and commercial success.
Similar Films/TV Series
SKYFALL, ALIAS, THE AMERICANS, JOHN WICK, OTHER JAMES BOND FILMS, MISSION IMPOSSIBLE
What’s New About the Story
The introduction to Gyuri Vargha and his subplot with Rebecca is an interesting format choice as it brings about the rare world of art espionage as opposed to just murders and hits. Having Gyuri Vargha excel at one sort of crime such as art or serial killing would help streamline his impact as an antagonist and there'd be no delay in pacing within the main conflict.
Wolf is an accepting and adaptable guy with a loyalty and care that can sometimes get him in trouble. Allison is a perky and committed person both to her kids and her job.
Uniqueness of Story
The action film is very reminiscent of other spy dramas in that Wolf has to rescue the person who is most important to him. By creating stakes beyond life or death or sticking to a different single world of crime, Wolf might have a more memorable impact.
WORK IN PROGRESS
The plot is a bit easy to predict and the characters outside of the romantic duo don't have their own inner conflicts which makes them feel flat. Pacing within scenes can get sidetracked towards conversations about relationship dynamics rather than the main task to stop Gyuri Vargha.
Tips for Improvement
Giving Allison more dimensions besides being a mother and romantic interest might help show her individuality off more. There is no tension in Gyuri Vargha and Wolf finding one another so perhaps making it more separated in their reunion could restore some of this uncertainty.